Hey V - Here is an idea. A cruzin tune concept. The speed and repeated rhythms made think of cruzin a city on a hot summer night. I also posted to the other location but the upload tool is poor - says it was a bad upload but plays fine --weird.

The return of Chuck Mac! Thanks for contributing to this, man. What I like about you Chuck is that you show up with your song arrangements , lyrics, and harmonies already planned out. You're awesome.

A lot of good energy in this tune. You must be a Queen fan. I liked the harmonies for bridge and chorus. That's very much what I was hoping for. What would make me want to pay 99 cents for this song is if the lyrics matched the hammering of guitar and drums in the listener's brain (at least that's the sound I was going for). In other words, I imagined the theme of the lyrics to be about something uproarious... to be sung as a credo... ala "Won't Get Fooled Again", "Rebel Rebel", "Baba oReilly" or "Smells Like Teen Spirit". Do you think you can try that?

Also, I uploaded a newer track v2.1 than this which has new section at around 2:19 into the song. Do you have any ideas for that? I'm thinking it could use a different vocal melody and possibly a guitar solo. I would like to keep this section in the song. I think it breaks it up and keeps the song from becoming predictable.

I look forward to hearing your feedback. Also, I have a friend who is going to record a live drum track. I think this song is going to be a winner!

=V=

HeY V! I'll head that direction and see what i can do!! :)

Nice CMAC!!!

I may have to give this song a spin!!

B

Please do Brooke! - I can hear the awesome processed vocal sound you used on Highway of Heroes on this. I think V is looking for a more driving verse - maybe a more developed story? I'm thinking a faster verbal/visual collage of cruzin sweltering hot city streets after dark. Hang outs, hanging out, people in cars, bikes, hmm hot women who are dressed to cool down... - adding a defined bridge? "...the city is in the street, escaping the heat, so many people to meet, after dark....." or some direction like that. What do you guys think?

Thats a good story arc -we can build off of that - lets work on this together Chuck.
Maybe its a collision course - two men in cars driving towards impact - an intersection - a crash. We could write it from their vantage point - maybe one man is full of hope, the other despair - two different men, with different lives, yet they meet at the same point in time - what does it mean??
I know, heady stuff :) - but maybe that's the build up.
Let me know if you want to work on that type of concept.

B

REALLY Cool concept B - let's try it. - so we are from - maybe different economic situations? Use a specific city like NYC? Broadway has two cool named sections "Canyon of Heroes" and Great White Way" ... What about a collision at the intersection of Broadway in the Canyon of Heroes and Liberty Street? I have a bead on a day trader that just scored big and was celebrating. Enters broadway at the "Great White Way" - has had maybe too much to drink, is in a hurry. Few cars are around at 3:00AM - he realizes he is getting back to work in just four hours... his foot feels like lead.

Awesome...
I'll take a Janitor working on Wallstreet coming off his 3:00am night shift. He's headed home to his family in the Bronx. This is his second job - works 16 hours a day... hard life - hard choices etc...

So I guess lyric wise, maybe we take a stab at writing our story arcs as a full song (verse and chorus) and then we can figure out how to mesh the two?? We could structure it as comepeting verses and the same chorus or shared verses (2 lines for you, 2 lines for me) or we really funk it up and intersplice our voices together.
Melody wise, I can either follow what you started or try a different angle - thoughts?

Sounds like a plan. This could be cool! Let's both try a melody and see where it goes - might end up with two different lines that might be capable of some counter point... could happen :)