Overall, I like the song a lot. Especially the first 3 minutes - solid as a rock. At 5 minutes, it's a little long for my ear. The material between 3:00 and 5:00 is a little repititious - too many instances of certain nice passages.
So, two ideas:
1. maybe edit down the last 2 minutes to about a minute?
2. guitar lead is nice (in the last 2 of 5 minutes), but too short; needs to be added to: either more melodic or more pronounced or both to make this guitar presence more memorable and the last minute of the song more definition?
Hope this is helpful.
Tue, Oct 21, 2008 @
12:43 PM UTC
Thanks, I agree, it is too long and repetitive.
Because of the guitar in the last 2 of 5 minutes, I was also thinking a vague sax type thing over the top. Maybe one of Marty's psychedelic sax things ie G2.
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