Any and all ideas/feedback are welcomed.

this is a great direction to go in - I really like it - particularly the first bars fit perfectly! that subdued kind of tone is a great build - will you keep pluggin away at it please? Not sure I can help much

I almost think you need a repeat of the intro section to start at .19 so that you get some time to develop before the bridge piece

after 'week passes/pass us by' I hear a bit more development - will post a second version in a moment with space for that

I just called it 'longer version' - see whether you agree

I'll keep plugging away. The longer version is better - thanks.

Tonight is a "No Kompoz" night - I'll be back.