If this is of any interest to you it might require a spinoff because I just couldnt hash out a third verse and prechorus so i repeated the second chorus and well youll see. Heres the words Someones coming but i cant make the face out just a spirit haunting drug down in my heart i wanna crawl but this dream is in control of me if its the devil say I gave at the office if he pushes say I know a good prophet Im not for sale but theres plenty more where I come from chorus You think you know who I am you think im part of your plan you got no claim to my soul my debt was paid long ago I traded all my tracks for some nail scars the kick is easy when it finds all the right parts The taste is gone and Im much stronger than I was before your not as tall as i remember you at one time and all your whispers are just noise way back in my mind Hows it feel to lose another customer to love
Nice vocal performance! But may I ask why you didn't use the lyrics I already wrote for the song?
Your lyrics were interesting, i just felt something different in the way words would fall into the rythym so I went with my own exploration. If the idea doesnt make the cut I still had fun and it was a stimulaing songwriting excercise for me anyway. Thanks for the feedback.
I am not sure I really understand your motivation here. Anyway, if you are interested in giving my lyrics a try, I am happy to give you any assistance you need. I made sure the number of syllables fits the song etc. So I can give you hints where the words fit into the rhythm. I can make a rough melody as sheet music or guitar track or even sing it. Then you can explore from there.
Please check out this file: https://www.kompoz.com/music/collaboration/838050/file/853597 and version 3 of the lyrics: https://www.kompoz.com/music/collaboration/838050/file/845238
Oh and great track!
Hi Mark! Thanks for your upload, I do like it very much! Great lyrics as well. I think this would be nice to work on with you. However it is sometimes a bit out of key, you do have a great sounding voice. Melodically I do like the verses a bit more than the choruses, but it is definitely useful! Thanks man, I will take some time to dive into and get back to you ASAP!