Dissolve my Soul Metal

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Creative Brief

A friend committed suicide so I was not in a positive mode when this song came together. Just keep in mind this is not my point of view. 

Thanks to Andrea's monstrous drumming it already sounds cool, but the song still needs some work.
It started from riff and the riff was so harmonically complex I've had no idea how to lay vocals over it. In the end it sounds pretty strange. The chorus is fine, but the verses are weird. I guess different lyrics and\or different melody may work. 

My singing is next to unbearable so if you can sing it better AND if improve the verses - welcome to the project. Maybe a second voice - some harmonies - may work too. I was yelling into a telephone microphone, but you don't have to do this.

Maybe some acoustic instruments may be added to the C part, not sure which. Oh, I've got a xylophone!  

Lyrics:

verse1:

Dear God,
Your creation is so nice
Thank you for inviting me and giving me the eyes

It looks so fine
Except for maybe just one fact
That this harmony is build on suffering and death

chorus:

So wipe my name
And dissolve my soul
There's nothing I can help you with at all

Wipe my name 
And dissolve my soul
There's nothing left to lose down in this hole

verse 2:

Now the dept got big
And my wife got mad
Nothing really different from what all others have

So my patience's gone
Watching vanity of life
Telling you that I enjoy will be the biggest lie

chorus (cut)

c-part:

We will not behave
We will not get saved
We love you
But you kill your lovers

We don't want to die
But cannot even try
To escape our faith
For us it's over

chorus:

So wipe my name
And dissolve my soul
There's nothing I can help you with at all

Wipe my name 
And dissolve my soul
This world is not a place to be at all.

Additional Information

Genre Metal Key Bm BPM 130.0

Collaboration started May 24, 2018 by engels
Last upload 4mo+11dy ago


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Initial Copyright Statement:

Copyright © 2018 by engels, All Rights Reserved.
Effective on May 24, 2018


Copyright Sharing Statement:

engels has declared the following Composition and Sound Recording copyright intentions for this collaboration, when completed:

Composition: Keep all rights exclusively
Sound Recording: Equally with other collaborators
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Collaborators
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engels Sergey Engel
Jerusalem Judea Israel
Creator
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AndreaSpace Andrea Spaziale
Casale Monferrato Alessandria Italy