Fair critiques. See if this is better.
much better!...not struggling to hear the words in those two areas anymore...thanks for cleaning that up...I've still got keyboards on the Help Wanted list...not sure if it really needs the extra texture...what says the band?... does it sound full enough as is? Sometimes less is more...or would some lite keys be good to flesh it out some more? Don't be shy. your read on these things matters