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skarlun / Tarjei Skarlund 1mo+14dy ago
could someone give some feedback on my master of my daughters (12) song? if someone has a some tips of how to get it better and so on... it is in norwegian. https://www.kompoz.com/music/collaboration/825909/file/1132374


     

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liljoe6string   commented 1mo+14dy ago


Its super well done. She did a great job on the vocals. The music is great for the style.. As far as improving the track, my suggestions would 3, 1 being a mix suggestion, and the other two music. Mastering sounds excellent. Mix: As much as I appreciate the concept of a pyramid of sound her vocal seems a bit too hot..Yes in this style it needs to be on top but, its a wee bit too over the music ergo not bedding as well as it should. This in part is due to her vocal hz range where + 1000 hz really hit the ear hard. Maybe a couple of -db? As for the music... The break at the end of the song could improve. I think the short fade of the music/vocals out sound right~ The music coming back in looses that dynamic with the first 2 notes, i dont think their necessary. They occur at 332 & 333, to me the full music should just KICK right back in. Of coarse at the appropriate time..this might require moving that entire section back to 332.. etc.. hard to tell from here. Now the 3rd suggestion is a coin toss as it would require real work. The first two could be done in minutes for a test, the last involves adjusting the energy build. Im going to try and describe it. The section of music (minus 332 333) has a great energy build and it works to kick back in her vocals but it could be great..the effect is to 'speed up' (notes per bar) for the two bars at 248 252~by loosing the syncopation there and driving it thru the roof.. then the vocals pop..a common tool in this style of music. Again it works as is but would be killer energy and have the higher dynamic value if you turned it loose at 248..And with the right knowledge and tools it could even increase notes per bar as it crashed into the vocals. GL with it.. Great job.

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skarlun   commented 1mo+11dy ago


wow. thanks so much, i really appreciate it... i did a try on the mix suggestions. but i dont really know what you mean with the other suggestions. i have read through it but i cant find out what you mean with the 332 and 333 and so on... i use logic, so if you have any suggestion to make me understand, please let me know :-)

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liljoe6string   commented 1mo+11dy ago


At 3:32 - 3:33 there are two notes that lead in the music, I believe those are unnecessary to enhance the dynamics. The follow up to that in the comment was to merely state taking those two notes out may, or may not mean moving the music for a natural point of reentry. (let me know if you need the process for moving all the music and for removing the 2 notes) The last suggestion is more involved at 2:48-2:52 here the music would change. The keys there in stead of being pulsing would switch to driving straight forward by increasing the beats per measure. This is a common technique in this style of music(pop + EDM/dance) driving the intensity to the max before the vocals come back in. In some case this is merely a programming thing. Im not versed in such programming others here are. Let me know if you want me to have someone reach out to you for more details. Lastly, as stated, the song works as is provided the vocals have been bedded better which was my first suggestion in my previous comments.. Hope that clarifies things. Its very much a hook

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skarlun   commented 1mo+11dy ago


just uploaded a new track. tried to pull back the vocals a bit. took away some dbs aroulnd 1200kHz. faded inn the beginning and trying to make a softer ending. Next version i will try to take away the 2 notes 2:32-2:33 and find see if i can try your trick from 2:48-2:-52 thanks so much. please

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liljoe6string   commented 1mo+11dy ago


Vocals are much closer~~ sounds better. Also the last key strike at 231is carrying the decay from the verb on them. Again the idea here is just sharper dynamics for tension. You have a couple of options 1. Use Logic to automate the time fx on the keys to turn off the verb there, which can be dicey because of logic not being quite so logical. HA! Or and recommended,, just revisit your fade there and make it fade faster to kill the verb tail so it goes silent faster..

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skarlun   commented 1mo+11dy ago


tnx again will work on it :-)

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skarlun   commented 1mo+10dy ago


I am feeling kind of dumb here :-) Could you explain this : The keys there in stead of being pulsing would switch to driving straight forward by increasing the beats per measure. Increasing beats or measure. Not sure if I understand. Sorry :-(

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skarlun   commented 1mo+10dy ago


hi. decided to go with tha last version here. i did the automation on the 231 i think that was a good tip. Thanks so much for your dedication. Really appreciate your advices... my daughters happy too...

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liljoe6string   commented 1mo+9dy ago


great mate!!