Lyrics, Songwriting and Arranging

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JennyBgoode / Jenny G Berry 4mo+10dy ago
Hey all, I am new here. I wrote these lyrics, but I don't know if they are good enough. Please tell me what do you think and if they can become a real song. (It was meant to be some sort of an Irish rock ballad, but it could also be something else). Thank you so much and stay safe JB _______________ Beautiful by Jenny G. Berry Verse I am looking through my window At the endless clover fields I am tired of the struggles And I'm just about to yield Life's a show and I'm a puppet Hanging, silly, by a thread I am facing crowd of faces But I can't see any friend Chorus I'm a wild mare in a bridle I'm a lioness in chains Though at night I sleep in satin I'm all wrapped in endless pains Beauty is a perfect liar Beauty is my perfect storm Like a phoenix I catch fire And I'm burning to no form Verse I am looking through the window And it's hurting me so bad Life is passing right beside me Like the strangers in my bed We all search for someone special To uplift us when we're down To redeem us from our weakness And to slay our inner hounds Chorus I'm a wild mare in a bridle I'm a lioness in chains Though at night I sleep in satin I'm all wrapped in endless pains Beauty is a perfect liar Beauty is my perfect storm Like a phoenix I catch fire And I'm burning to no form Bridge Beauty is the greatest con man And it's posing double threat It will make you an eye pleaser Then return to claim the debt I'm the queen of loveless Kingdom I'm a songbird without voice In a world of endless choices I'm a girl without a choice Chorus I'm a wild mare in a bridle I'm a lioness in chains Though at night I sleep in satin I'm all wrapped in endless pains Beauty is a perfect liar Beauty is my perfect storm Like a phoenix I catch fire And I'm burning to no form Outro Beauty was my perfect liar It created perfect storm Like the phoenix I caught fire And I burned out to no form https://www.kompoz.com/music/collaboration/1183472


   

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elizabethauzan   commented 4mo+10dy ago


Excellent:-) Welcome to Kompoz

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JennyBgoode   commented 4mo+10dy ago


Thank you so much, Elizabeth I am happy to be here JB

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davkoeh77   commented 4mo+10dy ago


Jenny, First of all, Welcome to Kompoz! What you?ve written is fantastic. They are excellent lyrics- they could absolutely be turned into a song! You should either post those lyrics to a project with music that is looking for lyrics and vocals. Or you could post them as your own project and ask people to create a musical track for them.

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JennyBgoode   commented 4mo+10dy ago


Hi David, Thank you very much for your kind and helpful response. I'm glad that you liked the lyrics. I opened a new project. Here is the link. https://www.kompoz.com/music/collaboration/1183472 live strong, stay safe! JB

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GoYeah   commented 4mo+10dy ago


Welcome to Kompoz :) Fabulous lyrics ! You bring these regularly and you will be famous in no time :):) You also must understand that to bring these into an instrumental part may require some editing and/or cutting ... If you have no problem with that, either you doing it or the singer, you're good to go :) Also, I would suggest to find either a guitar or keyboard player and create the song from the lyrics themselves. All in all, you were made for Kompoz ;-) GoYeah

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JennyBgoode   commented 4mo+10dy ago


Thank you very much Mr. GoYeah. While many, me inclusive, will not object being a bit famous (especially when their second name is, literally, "Glory" - Ha, ha); If I'm to be totally honest, (and somewhat realistic), it's not the fame or glory I am looking for, it's a voice. It's not a trivial thing for me to share my deepest thoughts and feelings publicly, but receiving the many kind feedbacks from this community definitely makes it easier for me. So thank you sir, and thank you all dear people. live strong and stay safe, J(G)B

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Holybrook   commented 4mo+6dy ago


Hi Jenny - love these lyrics and I think there's real potential here. I'm new here as well so not quite sure how the whole thing works but I agree with you that a sort of Celtic rock vibe seems to fit here. I'll join your collaboration and see if I ca put something together that might help.

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GalHornstein   commented 4mo+6dy ago


Very nice lyrics indeed. Well written.

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JennyBgoode   commented 4mo+6dy ago


Thanks you Gal JB

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JennyBgoode   commented 4mo+6dy ago


Thank you David JB

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versewithfriends   commented 4mo+6dy ago


Great lyrics if you have a melody in your head It pays to check out the latest instrumental tracks The ones seeking lyrics Its a good way of gettig started and recognised Best of luck Stay safe Mike

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JennyBgoode   commented 4mo+6dy ago


Thank you Mike JB

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franklinsane   commented 4mo+6dy ago


Beauty is a perfect storm.... in more ways than one..... nice.... Franklin

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JennyBgoode   commented 4mo+6dy ago


:)

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RonaldJoe   commented 4mo+4dy ago


Nice

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Hotjams   commented 4mo+4dy ago


These are good, IMHO.

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RonaldJoe   commented 4mo+4dy ago


Hi can you write melodies for songs?

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joel_sattlersongs   commented 11 days ago


Once you get the hang of it, kompoz is an all-you-can-eat buffet for lyricists. post this as a project, and don't forget to include a picture from pixabay.

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JennyBgoode   commented 11 days ago


Better late than never, Joel... ;-) https://www.kompoz.com/music/collaboration/1183472