Lyrics, Songwriting and Arranging

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Pinou / Pierre Portas 1yr+3mo ago
Hello, I am a new and quite a neophyte in the music world. But, I always have melodies in my head and this January decided to put words to them. I wrote a dozen texts two of which I presented below as examples (42nd street and Let's time go by). My question is simple: should I continue writing or stop right now? Thanks Pinou 42nd Street On a rainy day lights flashing everywhere cars running away I fall like a drunk on the street of nowhere I saw my face on the pavement moribund at 42nd street I walked for days and months begging and freezing weak and trembling like a leaf on the Autumn's tree I saw my face on the pavement moribund at 42nd street I meant to be under the light of the sky but skyscappers shadowed my life my wounds were made of stone and steel I was nothing but a rampant misery I saw my face on the pavement moribund at 42nd street No one bent to help people like years went by under the rain that cries for me I closed my eyes for ever Let's time go by Let's time go by to heal the wounds Let me remember your face in my dreams We were too youg we were innocent we made the world with our words You went away as if life did'nt care about love the thunder hit my soul and I died alived Let's time go by to heal the wounds Let me remember your face in my dreams Nothing I could do nothing to fight for the days became nights and I lost my heart Years after years the memories faded away but the pain remained you can love only once Let's time go by to heal the wounds Let me remember your face in my dreams


   

8 people like this: Songsinthekeyoflife, rcassent, RickvanMeijel, FidlerSongs, fisherman, Ulcur, Wally099, joel_sattlersongs

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joel_sattlersongs   commented 1yr+3mo ago


Excellent

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Pinou   commented 1yr+3mo ago


Many thanks. That's encouraging!

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Wally099   commented 1yr+3mo ago


Keep it up!

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ShannonB   commented 1yr+3mo ago


There's a place here specifically for poetry. I think it is managed by mikejmantecon. Usually when I look at lyrics I hear them with a melody, but this read more like poetry in my head.

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Pinou   commented 1yr+3mo ago


Thanks Might be challenging to mix poetry with songs. My problem is that I don't know if any singer or musician might like to do it Pinou

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NicolaOffidani   commented 1yr+3mo ago


Nice lyric....I can write a music for that...

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Pinou   commented 1yr+3mo ago


That would be great!

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USAsongwriter   commented 1yr+2mo ago


Poetry...if that's what someone feels it is...can ALWAYS be edited to become a song. JSS has TONS of stuff that reads like poetry at first glance...but then someone comes along...or vice versa...and what looks like poetry becomes a GREAT song. A willingness to edit your own words/lyrics/poetry to fit a musical arrangement is a writers greatest asset...so NEVER skip presenting what you have written if the intention of your words is for use in a song. If it looks and reads like poetry...so what...it can always be edited like I said if a poem is NOT what you really had in mind :)

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Pinou   commented 1yr+2mo ago


Thanks, fully share your views

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Ivislavcheva   commented 1yr+2mo ago


I would love to do the vocals!

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Pinou   commented 1yr+2mo ago


Hi, that would be nice, I would love to hera it

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RickvanMeijel   commented 1yr+2mo ago


Not bad at all! I like 42nd Street better though, because you're setting up nice 'visuals' in the verses. Just keep on writing and you'll get better and better. That's what I've found at least :)

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Pinou   commented 1yr+2mo ago


Thanks. If you like 42nd street, you may see this one Life of an hero Going to work on a day like the other days walking slowly seeing nothing His hands hurting his body aching blue collar he was working hard Life of an hero of suffering and dignity Pain of the day like others he said nothing Every morning he saw his face in the mirror sad and determined Life of an hero of suffering and dignity Once held sixty he could stop working but his body so hurt he would'nt live long He went to work for the last time nothing to keep him alive He took the road to the west where the sun dies and from the bridge he jumped to eternity Life of an hero of suffering and dignity noone to remember him Life of an hero of suffering and dignity

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noratio   commented 1yr+2mo ago


Nice words, keep it on! Do you sing?

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Pinou   commented 1yr+2mo ago


I wish I could sing but never tried

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Teshia   commented 1yr+2mo ago


You mentioned you have a tune for it. If you provided a score sheet or even a scratch vocal I would definitely want to sing it. As long as it's in my range anyway.

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Pinou   commented 1yr+2mo ago


Hi, unfortunately, I am no musician. Just putting words together Someone needs to invent a melody

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FidlerSongs   commented 1yr+2mo ago


I have a beautiful melody and came up with chords, if anyone is interested in working with me.

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Teshia   commented 1yr+2mo ago


Sure! My range is F3 - Ab5. Would love to see what you've got for it.

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guidaseag   commented 1 year ago


Yes, I like it a lot, these 2 lyrics, the first one called 42nd street , I woludn´t mind singing it, in fact I´d love to try. Congrats guida